London Midland Trains - critique my letter please

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alicat

Squire
Location
Staffs
An employee at Lichfield City station is making life difficult for me. I brushed off his first notice informing me that if my bike was parked outside one of the 12 cycle stands it would be removed. Now he is threatening me with British Transport Police! Here is a picture of someone else's bike the same employee chose to ignore for the best part of a week.

I am really angry but more than that I just want some commonsense to break out at London Midland Trains. Any constructive criticism on my draft letter would be appreciated and any suggestions on how to resolve this would be gratefully received.

'I am writing to complain about threatening notices left on my cycle by a member of your station staff at Lichfield City station. I enclose two notices and a photograph of the cycle rack taken on 21st August.

By way of background, I commute by train from Lichfield City Station and have done so for most of the period since 1994. For the past three years I have cycled to and left my cycle at the station. Until about two years ago I, in common with other commuters, left my cycle chained to the railings round the stairwell. Then 12 Sheffield stands were erected and since then I have used them whenever there has been a stand free. However, for the past three months the stands have frequently been full (two or three times a week) when I have arrived at the station at about 8 am so when this has happened I have reverted to chaining my cycle to the railings. I avoid the area next to the lift where there is a notice confirming that cycles are an obstruction and I always take care that my cycle is not in the way of other station users.

On Tuesday 15th July I returned to my cycle find the enclosed notice on it [notice in large font informing me that my cycle was parked illegally and if it was parked there again it could be removed.] An employee named Chris confirmed that he had placed the notice on my cycle after a visit from his line manager. ‘Chris’ declined to give his surname or to name his line manager so I could discuss the matter with him. After some persistence on my part, Chris copied clause 14 of the byelaws for me. I have since studied clause 14 and can confirm that I was not in breach of them. My cycle was not causing a hindrance nor an obstruction and I had not placed it where I had been instructed or directed not to. I returned to the ticket office to discuss the matter in a rational manner with Chris but he was aggressive and maintained that my interpretation of clause 14 was wrong. He said words to the effect: “I am the union safety rep. I have discussed what you have said with two levels of management above me and you are wrong.”

I continued to leave my cycle at the station and when necessary left it in a slightly different position chained to the railings. In the week commencing ?? I did notice a cycle parked on the cycle rack which had swung round by 90 degrees so that it was liable to be tripped over by anyone with a visual impairment. It remained in the same position for at least three days. I enclose copies of the photo I took of it on ?? and ??. I did observe that Chris was on duty on both days and I did not notice any notices on it. Nor did any of the station staff take the sensible and simple step of turning it round to its normal position.

On Friday 12th September I returned to my cycle to find the enclosed notice on it [notice in very large font again informing me that my cycle was illegally parked and that if it was parked anywhere on the station outside the cycle rack the matter could be reported to British Transport Police.] I understand from another station employee that Chris again placed the notice and that I was not the only person to receive a notice that day.

The position is as follows:

1. Your website states:‘Cycling is great for the environment and keeps you healthy too. Why not cycle to your local station and continue your onward journey on a London Midland train?’ However, the provision of 12 cycle stands at Lichfield City station is clearly inadequate to allow this. There is ample room on the platform to increase the number of cycle stands to cater for present and anticipated need.
2. If this is not possible, I remain willing to discuss where it is acceptable to leave my cycle at the station. I reiterate that I have remained compliant with clause 14 of the byelaws.
3. The lift at the station is so slow that if I do follow the recommendation in the second notice and leave the station to find a safe place to leave my cycle I will miss my train. The prospect of doing this two or three times a week is not appealing. To make matters worse, your newly reliveried trains now contain no spaces for cycles so it is no longer an option to take my cycle on the train instead.
4. Your employee Chris is making it difficult for me to continue to commute by train. I consider he is harassing me when he is leaving threatening notices on my cycle but not taking any action in respect of a cycle that is clearly causing a hindrance. He dealt with my reasonable questions about the first notice in an aggressive way. I question whether he is suited to a customer-facing role.
5. If the threat of removing my cycle is carried out, I confirm I will seek an immediate order under the Torts (Interference with Goods) Act 1977 for delivery of the goods, and for payment of consequential damages. I put you on notice that my cycle has a Dutch lock with a cable attached. The lock has been discontinued so if the cable is cut I will seek the cost of both a new lock and a new cable.

I strongly object to receiving threatening notices when I am merely trying to do what you purport to encourage. I am a law-abiding farepaying passenger and have nothing to fear from being reported to British Transport Police although I do find it upsetting to be threatened in this way. I hope you will agree that issuing customers with notices in such terms is not a long-term solution to the problem of inadequate cycle provision at Lichfield City station.

I look forward to your immediate confirmation that no action will be taken against me or my cycle when this matter is under discussion and to the resolution of my complaint within the 10 working days set out in your Passenger’s (sic) Charter.

Yours sincerely'
 

zimzum42

Legendary Member
i know you've got a lot to say, but you could do with making it a bit shorter, anyone reading it is likely to start scanning it and not reading it properly, it's very long.

If you feel that you can't remove any of the info, then how about having a summary with bullet points at the start. You need to grab attention at the very beginning and get all the big points over right at the start.

Good luck, this dude sounds like a twat
 
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alicat

Squire
Location
Staffs
Thanks, both. I'll make it punchier. I've got the day off today so I've got time to get it right.

This must have happened to other people so the next step is to get them mobilised too.
 

CopperBrompton

Bicycle: a means of transport between cake-stops
Location
London
I would make it a 'more in sorrow than anger' thing.

Start with their commitment to cycling, and how pleased you are to see from their website that they encourage this. Then go on to say that their success in promoting this means that the capacity provided is no longer keeping up. Then that unfortunately you've experienced a problem with one of their employees, and you are confident that his behaviour does not reflect the position of the company. Finally ask for assurance that the matter will be addressed with additional capacity, and that in the meantime your bicycle will not be removed or harmed.

Ben
 

charliesurf

New Member
Hi,

I would remove the part about

" I question whether he is suited to a customer facing role"

this does not add weight to your argument and becomes personal, you want to stick with your reasoned approach. Thats the only thing I would change the rest is super
PS its seems that hes getting to you so deep breaths and all that......
 

Amanda P

Legendary Member
The letter is too long - most people who are supposed to deal with correspondence will read the first couple of paragraphs and skim the rest.

And just one other point (though I'm sure you've thought if it) if you're going to include the legal stuff towards the end, make sure your letter is registered. That way if you follow up on your legal threat, the train company can't say "what letter?".

I'd leave the legal stuff for now and revert to it only if you have to. It sets the matter up as a confrontation rather than a "let's get our heads together and sort this out".

In the meantime, what about getting hold of the transport police yourself and consulting them on the matter? That way, when/if Chris "reports" you to them, you'll have got your oar in first. It would be kinda fun if when Chris phones them, a plod turns up, recognises you and takes your side...
 
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alicat

Squire
Location
Staffs
Thanks, folks, for your input. I am now going to the station to ask 'Chris' to confirm he put the notice on my bike and if I'm feeling brave call his bluff by asking him to call the police. I'm then going to get the notices scanned so I can send off the letter by email.

Here is the final, shorter (!) version

'Dear Sirs

I am writing to complain about threatening notices left on my cycle by a member of your station staff at Lichfield City station. I enclose copies of both notices.

Your website states:

‘Cycling is great for the environment and keeps you healthy too. Why not cycle to your local station and continue your onward journey on a London Midland train?’

I am pleased to see that you have a positive attitude to cycling. However, your success in promoting cycling is such that the 12 Sheffield cycle stands provided are no longer enough and your employee’s way of dealing with this is causing me a severe amount of concern and worry.

On 15th July and on 12th September I received notices on my cycle, which I had left chained to the railings round the stairwell. You will note that both notices are written in a large, bold typeface and that the first notice threatens to remove my cycle and the second to report me to British Transport Police. On each occasion, the Sheffield cycle stands provided were full when I arrived at the station just after 8 am. I confirm that on neither occasion was my cycle placed in contravention of clause 14 of your byelaws: it was not a hindrance nor an obstruction and I had not placed it where I had been instructed or directed not to.

A member of your station staff by the name of Chris has confirmed to me that he placed the first notice on my cycle and a colleague has confirmed that Chris also placed the second. On the first occasion I tried to discuss the matter rationally with your employee but he was aggressive and maintained that my interpretation of clause 14 was wrong. He claimed that two levels of management above him agreed with him so I must be wrong. He likened my actions to a car driver obstructing a car park that was full.

There is ample room on the platform at Lichfield City station to increase the number of cycle stands to cater for present and anticipated need. Before cycle stands were provided, cycles were left parked round the railings and were not a hindrance or obstruction. It makes sense for cyclists to leave them there when the rack is full because they are away from the main flow of passenger traffic and are near the CCTV camera.

Your employee’s threats are making it difficult for me to continue to commute by train. I find it upsetting to receiving notices threatening to remove my cycle and report me to the British Transport Police when I have commuted from the station for 14 years and have done nothing wrong. I hope that there can now be an ‘outbreak of common sense’ and that we can agree an acceptable place for me and my fellow cycle commuters to leave our bikes while the number of cycle stands is increased.

Yours sincerely'
 

Amanda P

Legendary Member
I like it. Just check the last para.:

alicat said:
I find it upsetting to receiving notices threatening to remove my cycle
 
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alicat

Squire
Location
Staffs
Just been to the station. Chris not on duty. The two members of staff rolled their eyes and said 'Not another one'. They encouraged me to send the letter off and said he was a strange lad.

Thanks for all your help. Off for a ride on my fixed to relax a bit!
 
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alicat

alicat

Squire
Location
Staffs
I'd love to see them turn up and try and interview a bike or wait for hours for its owner to return!

Actually I did sidle up to a British Transport Police officer at New Street station to ask what stance they would be likely to take. He reckoned that the station staff would remove it in case it contained a bomb! I didn't really pursue this to its logical conclusion i.e. which of the tubes would you put the bomb in and why should a bike parked next to the cycle rack be suspected of containing a bomb whilst a bike parked on the cycle rack wouldn't.
 

JamesAC

Senior Member
Location
London
Apparently a bike frame is a legitimate terrorist risk. Unfortunately some get carried away with what they see as a powerful and exciting statement.<snip>
A friend of mine left her bike chained to a bit of street furniture near a TA barracks. When she got back from wherever she'd gone, so had the bike. So she 'phoned the polis to report the theft, and they said that the bike had been removed as it was a security threat. My friend asked where it had been removed to: into the TA barracks, came the reply!!:tongue::biggrin:

James
 

domd1979

Veteran
Location
Staffordshire
Railway bylaws are enforceable by "authorised persons" - doesn't have to be BTP. In other words TOC staff/contractors could remove a bike if they were minded to (and happened to have the equipment to hand).


I'd call his bluff. The Transport Police won't be interested. They're based all the way over at New St, and wouldn't travel up there just to sort a bike out.
 
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alicat

Squire
Location
Staffs
I have parked my bike at the station for the last three years and I suspect that the staff all recognise it by now. I wouldn't have thought that a middle-aged Caucasian female in possession of a sit up and beg hub gear bike with a basket on the front (not my only bike I hasten to add) fits the typical terrorist profile but I suppose you never know!
 
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