The Velvet Curtain said:If you read it out in a Roger McGough voice it's not too bad.
Uncle Mort said:I liked it too. To be honest I wouldn't have minded if one of my kids had written it.
That was my reservation about it. There is something about the narrative build-up that seems quite mature, which the subject and shaky construction can't really disguise.TBH I thought it might have been written by an adult poet trying to mimic a kid!
Tim Bennet. said:That was my reservation about it. There is something about the narrative build-up that seems quite mature, which the subject and shaky construction can't really disguise.
Fnaar said:Yes, he could have just written:
I picked a snot
and flicked it
and it landed on the teacher's chair, innit!
Some fella done a fart too.